Delsie Wartenberg
Monday, August 8, 2011
What do you think of my writing, first page?
In the beginning, you talk about a raft, but then all of a sudden you talk about some random guy. maybe you should add a transition in between the first and second sentence to make it more smoother, see what I mean?
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