Do you like the beginning of this story?

You should work on supporting the characters. Also, you need to keep a consistent linear pattern, it skips around a lot. Ummmm.... Possibly consider describing the environment that exists around nick. Seems like you just framed the story, but haven't given enough detail. It has the potential to become a good story, despite its cliche orphan kid. And furthermore, be sure to proof read you're work.